Loki Wyrd Posted December 5, 2009 Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 (edited) The texture of thought gnawing inside of my cheek. Burying a hole my tongue can look through; or uncovering an entrance: salamanders lurk in full disclosure, wagging tails like tongues. Song of the soft pulp of long-fallen trees, in my hands crumble. Edited December 5, 2009 by Loki Wyrd Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loki Wyrd Posted December 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 The preliminary examinations show severe blunt force trauma to the head. The assailant likely struck multiple times before sitting down to have another drink. Things had not gone as he planned. Frustrated, he struggled for an outlet. Something to be defeated. A sense of control. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyvern Posted December 5, 2009 Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 I really like both of these poems, Loki Wyrd. :-) The unsettling imagery of gnawing and burrowing used to personify the thoughts of the first poem was very effective, as was the nature imagery that you closed it with. The second poem was also very good and struck me as more of an observation and contemplation... very different from the poetic imagery of the first poem, but well structured and interesting in its own right. One thing that I am curious about is the connection between these two pieces if there is one - are they completely seperate poems, or did you group them together here for a reason? Great poems Loki Wyrd, thanks for sharing them here. :-) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loki Wyrd Posted December 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 Thank you for your interest, Wyvern. The poems only real connection is that I wrote them both in the last 24 hours--and they were born from close to the same place within my head. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Preprise Posted December 7, 2009 Report Share Posted December 7, 2009 I like it!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loki Wyrd Posted December 7, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 7, 2009 (edited) It's turtles all the way down-- To mind's end or a place too small to exist. Carrying the world upon its back. And universes bubble forth as from a cauldron: Into Rapid expansion at the release of energy; (a sigh or a laugh) escaping unexpected in all its form. Edited December 8, 2009 by Loki Wyrd Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Preprise Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 This is awesome! I would love to collaborate with you! Have you ever written lyrics for a song? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loki Wyrd Posted December 11, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 11, 2009 Thanks for the support. =) I'm sure I've written lyrics...poetry first struck me thanks to Bob Dylan and Paul Simon, so it seems if anything I've drifted away from the tendency. I do love music, and the idea of being part of it. How would you suggest going about collaborating? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Preprise Posted December 11, 2009 Report Share Posted December 11, 2009 Thanks for the support. =) I'm sure I've written lyrics...poetry first struck me thanks to Bob Dylan and Paul Simon, so it seems if anything I've drifted away from the tendency. I do love music, and the idea of being part of it. How would you suggest going about collaborating? I have some chords and melodies kicking around. The melody will give you a rough syllable count and the chords will give you the song structure. From there you can do whatver the hell you want. Then we tweak and twook until it's right. I can send you a video in pretty much any format you like. My email is juggling(dot)jason(at)gmail(dot)com. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loki Wyrd Posted December 11, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 11, 2009 This winter break I'll have some time. If the mood strikes me, I will let you know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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