cryptomancer Posted July 19, 2009 Report Share Posted July 19, 2009 Alone I travel the chaos of time The void of black decay my home The winds of night my cushioned bed The lights of day echo in my head. How many paths have I now tread? Where did my destiny lead? For I found my destiny dead, And take whichever path I need. Walk a mile that seems a life, The timeline's future clear, No mist surrounds the sliver edge, Its gentle kiss holds no fear. Wrap the world in clouds of red, The sunset lights the moon, Veils of soaking sorrow fed, Their tears my walls of doom. Sink the sun below the sea, Wash the earth in fire, Wait the stars to light my way, Below, scorched clouds perspire. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OxygenPlant Posted July 20, 2009 Report Share Posted July 20, 2009 I LOVE IT. Sink the sun below the sea, Wash the earth in fire, That line as amazing. Such beautiful imagery! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Harmonious_Echos Posted July 21, 2009 Report Share Posted July 21, 2009 very nice imagery....just a suggestion, would the word "await" work better instead of the word 'wait' for the beginning line of the last verse? anyway it seems like it would help the flow a bit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cryptomancer Posted July 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted July 21, 2009 Thank you all, I agree Harmony, 'await' does flow better, however, i chose 'wait' because it suggests too the 'weight' of the heavens above me, even where i seem to belong, the heaviness is there. thank you all, Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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