Mardrax Posted May 2, 2007 Report Share Posted May 2, 2007 (edited) lovehatejuxtaposethose not opposedthe first behindthe latter enclosedFabergéin cast yellow plasticshell within a shelltaken awayon the full moon tideRachmaninovon a one octave xylophonea tool not easily wieldedby those unproficient Edited January 19, 2015 by Mardrax Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyvern Posted May 3, 2007 Report Share Posted May 3, 2007 Good poem, Mardrax. :-) I really like the rhythm of the words and the rhyme in the first stanza, and once again think that you demonstrate a knack for incorporating syllables well in your poetry. I also found the juxtaposition of elegant jewelery and composers with the limited resources of plastic and single octave xylophones very interesting and thought-provoking. The one word that really felt out of place to me in the poem was "unproficient" in the very last line, as it felt very technical and somewhat stilted to me in comparison to the rest of the piece. Anyway, I think this is a well done poem Mardrax. :-) Thanks for sharing it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mardrax Posted May 3, 2007 Author Report Share Posted May 3, 2007 Everything has a meaning, Wyv mate. Here, everything continues on the latter and the title is a timestamp Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Parmenion Posted May 4, 2007 Report Share Posted May 4, 2007 You have always been too clever for me! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mardrax Posted May 6, 2007 Author Report Share Posted May 6, 2007 that's because of all those bad quality Irish greens mate Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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