Justin Silverblade Posted March 25, 2007 Report Share Posted March 25, 2007 (edited) In Moments Love, is real. Unconcerned, inattentive, unbelievable, Indefinable, Whimsical, superfluous, wanton, Sublime. Real, in moments that Aren’t. Flirting brushes, a lustful gaze, Playful, painful, laughing joys. But when perchance those eyes first meet As flesh touches flesh, Time stops. That is real. That is when we first begin to feel. Real in moments that Won’t. Knowing softly, silently, Sometimes in tears, Knowing brilliantly, blissfully, Blindingly aware, That nothing will Ever be the same. Yesterday’s haunts won’t recognize you, ᅟ ᅟ ᅟ Today’s trials won’t see you, ᅟ ᅟ ᅟ ᅟ ᅟ ᅟ And all tomorrow’s hopes will be delightfully foreign. All ᅟ ᅟ becomes different. ᅟ Smiles ᅟ different. ᅟ ᅟ Cries ᅟ ᅟ different. ᅟ ᅟ Sighs ᅟ ᅟ different. ᅟ ᅟ Lies ᅟ ᅟ different. Dreams ᅟ ᅟ drift ᅟ in: ᅟ ᅟ never before ᅟ dreamt. ᅟ ᅟ Then ᅟ ᅟ Beauty ᅟ is Redefined. Real, in moments that Can’t. When things should be: In a way we can only know Suddenly But within a core of us So deeply that the very Fiber Of the moment is made Clear To us, but is wrong So wrong From what it should be And we can move only To change it, correct it, to Fix It Or end it Somehow, some way, Even if we have no idea how Because that moment clearly Fundamentally Cannot be As it is. Real, in moments that Don’t. Where suffering knows no place, Banished from between embrace. Where the very depths of Hell Can not breach those sacred gates. Love, is real in Moments. ~~~ Edit: I've edited your post with the spaces as you had in your post editing, hope you don't mind it. The indent instructions I used are here. /Tanny Edit: Having spacing problems. In the third verse the line: "Today’s trials won’t see you," should be indented, and then the following line "And all tomorrow’s hopes will be delightfully foreign." should be indented twice. The rest of the verse is supposed to have sporadic spacing and indenting, with "Redefined." ending the verse squarely un-indented on the left. It shows up as indented and spaced on my post editing but not in the displayed finished post If anyone knows how or if I can fix this please let me know. PS - I have tried the "indent" option on the posting but it also double spaces things, which I don't want. ~~~ Not the first poem since my return to creativity, but more fitting to be my first to post. General feedback as well as critical suggestions are all welcome, but not required. Hope you enjoyed! - Justin Edited March 25, 2007 by Tanuchan Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mira Posted March 25, 2007 Report Share Posted March 25, 2007 I'm glad to see you back around these parts Justin. Your words are always welcome and I hope to find the time to critique them throughly in the future. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kikuyu_Black_Paws Posted March 31, 2007 Report Share Posted March 31, 2007 Beautiful. There are no words to describe it. Keep it up! I want to read more!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts