Patrick Posted March 22, 2007 Report Share Posted March 22, 2007 First off let me start by saying that I really enjoyed this story. The descriptions you use are wonderful, I particularly liked the expression of "lightning kissed a tree in the forest". The very few (compared to the length) typos only made me stop once during reading the story. In the Lady in the wood chapter you wrote "Yvain gave the sword an experimental sword". I think you mean swing instead of the second "sword". That said I felt that the end of the story was a bit rushed. The whole story is built on the threat of the Saxons and in the end they are brushed very simply aside. Maybe you could show what the Saxon threat consists of prior to the ending to the story. It also wasn't really clear to me why the two warriors had been turned to stone. I might have missed a small detail, but if that isn't the case then it might bear some extra explanation. I'm definitely looking forward to reading more from you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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