Arashi Posted December 16, 2005 Report Share Posted December 16, 2005 well I sat down last night and wrote these two pieces to see if I still had some skills. decided to go one way and than try to go a different direction. Rythm in the Blues I am now further away from you then I wish Dead thoughts drag on welled in the abyss Kiss the lips of this decaying dream To bring new life into my world unseen Keep these thoughts in the back of your mind I wish to return to you in due time Until we rendezvous, my love I shall not stare at the stars above ____________ Stars Apart Zig-zag down us oh knife of steel As the wheel of time spins closer to the finale Licked with blood from the emotioned sleeve Etching the words that are to painful to read View the world turn on its sickle As you head east and I travle west We part never to be seen again In eachothers arms we bare the scars Of once faught for love One of Goodbye The other Forever Loved ____________________________ So what is the verdict? am I still qualified to write or do I need to pack my things? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sweetcherrie Posted December 16, 2005 Report Share Posted December 16, 2005 hmmm *checks* *reads* *thinks* I guess you can still write a bit more...or more, please do I liked the second one better than the first, but that's more personal taste than anything else I think Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arashi Posted December 16, 2005 Author Report Share Posted December 16, 2005 yeah, I think the second one came out better too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arashi Posted December 20, 2005 Author Report Share Posted December 20, 2005 Would you believe it if I said it only took me about 15 minutes to write both of these pieces? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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