Sweetcherrie Posted March 16, 2005 Report Share Posted March 16, 2005 Kissed by soothing dreams asleep with eyes wide open The man in front force-feeds on monotonic tone the knowledge to defeat the rising of the dawn Yet, time just clocks along lost in my waking dreams Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loki Wyrd Posted March 17, 2005 Report Share Posted March 17, 2005 Waking dreams are my favorite kind. My only constructive advice is that possible you may want to try to reinvent your second line to become something more fresh and uniquely you. Thanks for sharing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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