Equester Posted December 30, 2004 Report Share Posted December 30, 2004 (edited) Sitting on the sand beside my own shadow. All alone and placid Serenity springs from the tips of peaking waves rolling t’ward the shore The salty scent of deep ocean air surrounds me with poised existence Elegant harmony gently flowed, across my lips Pure tranquility Edited December 31, 2004 by Equester Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
reverie Posted December 30, 2004 Report Share Posted December 30, 2004 (edited) Welcome to the Pen Equester... I'm rev... Anyway, nice little meditation on the soothing effect of the sea... The 5,7,5 syllable base creates a calm and reflective flow, Also I see a possiblilty to 'turn' or 'tune' the tone a little by altering the tense of your last stanza... Look forward to more, revery the dreamlost "seldom known and seldom seen..." the dream continues... Edited December 30, 2004 by reverie Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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