dragonqueen Posted November 30, 2004 Report Share Posted November 30, 2004 (edited) Wait Wait. You're running so fast I can't keep up. What's the hurry? It's not going anywhere. Wait. Don't leave me behind. No need to rush. No need to be so serious. So eager for responsibility and privleges. Take your time. You're going to regret this. Stop and smell the roses. Wait. Don't grow up so fast. ***** Painted Faces Wipe your face blank Pick up your paints Paint the mask you want to show the world today. After all, all the world's a stage And you're just an actor and All that matters is material things. Really, this is who I am, But how can I help it when everyone around me is so corrupted? Maybe there's a few cracks, a tiny flaw, But that's what seperates the best from the rest How well you can paint your face And don't smile, don't cry You'll crack the mask. Guess the only thing that matters is How well you can fake it. Edit: Spelling errors Edited November 30, 2004 by dragonqueen Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
reverie Posted November 30, 2004 Report Share Posted November 30, 2004 (edited) I like the first one best... Sometimes you have to grow up too fast, but it's nice if you have the opportunity to take your time... Inner child pleading with the would-be-adult to slow down maybe? The "it" in the fourth line makes me curious as to what "it" is... um, i'm prolly the last one that should point this out, but you have a few minor spelling errors in the second one: like using "and" instead of "an" ...kind of breaks up the flow. so I think it's worthy of a second look... a little editing here and there never hurts... rev... Edited November 30, 2004 by reverie Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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