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The Pen is Mightier than the Sword

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i could never be sure about love

always had a practical mind

 

i've liked some people before

but it feels different this time

 

people talk about love

so many stories we've heard

 

didnt hold any water until she

looked at me and said those 3 words

 

i couldnt even react to it

all i could do was believe

 

all i could do was feel my heart

swelling without reprieve

 

and i was filled with a send of joy

i find it hard to explain

 

but im sure you'd have seen me

grinning ear to ear on that day

 

and maybe some doubts of mine

could finally be put aside

 

love cant be such a bad thing

if it gives you that sense of pride.

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narrative style seems to be your thing.

 

I think Essays / journal type things could help you develop more... just a thought...

 

I hear the lyric quality too. Simple is the rhyme scheme, but it makes for song-like flow... I can hear a singer's voice in it... The statement then explanation/reflection form of the majority of your couplets works well with the song form too...

 

neat

 

rev...

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