Vincent Silver Posted May 30, 2004 Report Share Posted May 30, 2004 I close my eyes and think of you Remembering the first time you said "I love you" I can almost feel your touch I can almost feel flesh aginst flesh as if you're here But then I open my eyes And you're not there I'm only left with the thought of you ___ Meh, long distance realtionships suck. I want to be with him so bad, but I have to wait one more year before those thoughts become real. tweaked spelling Vincent - hope you don't mind. -Peredhil Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DL_Snake Posted June 10, 2004 Report Share Posted June 10, 2004 Long distance relationships do kinda drain you. I had one and it ended early this year. I have no regrets with it though, and I enjoyed every minute of it. Just so some would ask, we are now good friends, she and i. Now to the heart of the matter, your poem drew strong feelings from me, if only because I was in a similar situation. i can feel your need and your longing from your lines, well done! I know this is a personal work, so please pardon me if i stepped out of line. PS: it is worth the wait, it just makes things sweeter Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sorciere Posted June 10, 2004 Report Share Posted June 10, 2004 I truly know how you feel also and I, as you, am wishing for time to speed a little until I can be closer to the one I love. As for the actual poem, I think you said an awful lot in those few lines. Sometimes catching the essence of the feeling without having to resort to 7 verses 24 lines long is hard. You did it well Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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