Walk Away

[Vlad]

Blood boiling;

Anger rising;

Senses spinning;

Why can't I just walk away?

 

Teeth grinding;

Fists clenching;

Heart pounding;

Why can't I... Just walk away?

 

Hormones rushing;

'Drenaline pumping;

Pride grumbling;

Why. Can't. I. Just. Walk. Away?

 

Hate flooding;

Fear crushing;

Passion growing;

Whycan'tIjustwalkaway?

 

Pulse receding;

Thought returning;

Muscles relaxing;

Because I could just... Walk away.

[blain]

Cool. Twice. Well put together, and I really like the content.

 

The third version of the fourth line is a little rough. With what comes after, it would seem to want to have some kind of a transition going on there. Perhaps something in between the third and fourth stanza -- a particle, a fragment, whatever -- would serve that purpose as well or better.

 

And I really like the content. Did I mention that? I like anybody pointing out that there are nonviolent options available even in extreme anger, and that they lead to being calm faster/better than the violent options do.

 

Thanks for this.