Vlad Posted January 21, 2004 Report Share Posted January 21, 2004 The only one who deserves respect The clear cut opposite of who I am The only one fate could ever select The clear cut truth of my life's scam One who is a genius of her own sort She denies the mind, and most reason too One who makes her life just a sport She denies the world that she sees through Creating her own intellectual voids Creating her own mental exploits A person who should not exist To loathe her soul, my mind insists It is her I feel destined to oppose It is for her that is this hate I chose A philosophy of life outside this world She can believe that it is all true A philosophy that life is mankind's pearl She cannot believe anything new Cast off the body into the wastes Her goal for being shoots down my own Cast off the soul into the wastes Her goal for being shoots down my own OOC: I feel a story coming on... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Regel Posted January 21, 2004 Report Share Posted January 21, 2004 Personalities on a collision course. Careful Vlad the old saying is that love and hate are two sides of the same coin. This could be the prelude to a torrid affair or you could just hate her guts. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yuki Kokoro Posted January 21, 2004 Report Share Posted January 21, 2004 Oh, a story, a story! *jumps up and down* Personally I would be very interested in hearing more about these characters; the reasons the speaker hates the girl are so intriguing. "genius of her own sort/ She denies the mind, and most reason too (as do all women. ^_~ )", "creating her own intellectual voids", "She can believe that it is all true/ A philosophy that life is mankind's pearl". That last line especially I would like to hear more about. One of the reasons the speaker hates her is her optimism and love of life (which he sees as willful blindness)? This opposes his goal for being because he is that sure life is worthless? ...very interesting... this sounds more and more like a romance. This poem left me with an interesting reaction of relating to both the speaker and the person the speaker loathes so. Excellent poem and definite story material. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vlad Posted January 21, 2004 Author Report Share Posted January 21, 2004 Regel - You're almost right, but not quite. I know I should hate her, but I haven't figured out why. Yuki - Yes, willful blindness is a good way to put it. I don't want to go into details too much about her, but I see life in a realistic view. It is not inherently worthless, it only is if we chose to not to lend it value. As for her, I can't really say because I'm not sure. P.S. - (This is directed to one person, and one person only. You know who you are.) If you read the poem and think it's about you, don't worry it's not. You can ask me later. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alaeha Posted January 21, 2004 Report Share Posted January 21, 2004 "I'm not a pessimist. I'm a realist." Except that I prefer the term cynic, becaus it works in neat letters like y and n. Nicely done. Don't really have much to suggest except maybe lengthening the line about mental exploits for the sake of the otherwise regular meter. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Quincunx Posted January 21, 2004 Report Share Posted January 21, 2004 Reading this poem shut off Rydia (the sentimental side) like a lamp and brought Tzimfemme charging to full prominence, and not just for the series of statements within it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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