Loki Wyrd Posted January 17, 2004 Report Share Posted January 17, 2004 (edited) I've been writing some more today. This time I have four things to share. I can't scribble away fast enough To cover up all this shit Mistakes I've made without a sound But with a pencil in my hand ---------------------------------- I think I'm a schizophrenic, And I know I'm drug dependent. Though I've never taken anything It all seems so clear; If it wasn't for my phobias I wouldn't know what to fear. My panic attacks come and they go; How's a guy to be certain if he just doesn't know? ---------------------------------- Where does all my anger go Hidden away inside Locked up without reprieve Until suddenly... It bursts My fury unleashed Unremitting and overwhelming Destroying all I touch ---------------------------------- I never woke up Feeling rested and reassured The night before's events never transpired Just a nightmare A dream gone terribly wrong I've been considering adding another line to the last one, but I just don't know. Right now I feel it has a high level of uncertainty, and I like that, but another line could pull it together and maybe add something. I can't help but writing, forgive me for posting just anything, but I get a kick out of sharing - most of the time (see first one). Edited January 17, 2004 by Loki Wyrd Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loki Wyrd Posted January 18, 2004 Author Report Share Posted January 18, 2004 An eerie chill overcomes me Supplanting the warmth Thinking of the past And what could have been But it's not It's only a chill Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spiders Soul Posted January 18, 2004 Report Share Posted January 18, 2004 You are always commenting on others works.. and reading this I feel I have to say something... and my comment is: I love each little snid bit.. and no need to ask forgivness for posting like this I for one dont mind and rather enjoy it *Tumbs Up* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loki Wyrd Posted January 18, 2004 Author Report Share Posted January 18, 2004 Thanks. Most of my poems usually rhyme, but lately I seem to have been just writing out whatever comes to me. Whatever works, right? Now I've got to get it to work... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yuki Kokoro Posted January 18, 2004 Report Share Posted January 18, 2004 (edited) I liked the second one, especially the line: "If it wasn't for my phobias/ I wouldn't know what to fear." It inspired this little poem that I now don't know what to do with or how to continue so I think I'll just post it here: If it wasn't for my phobias I wouldn't know what to fear. What should panic, alarm or penetrate My mind's dark cold revere. If it weren't for schizophrenia I wouldn't know what to think To decide on my own would be difficult Lacking the voices without any sync The rhythm of your second poem (especially the first four lines) was also cool. All this writing is bringing out some interesting things. Speaking of which, I quite enjoyed the first poem as well. "Mistakes I've made without sound/ but with a pencil in my hand", nice way to phrase it. Though writing is rarely a mistake, practice helps us grow. Edited January 18, 2004 by Yuki Kokoro Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loki Wyrd Posted January 18, 2004 Author Report Share Posted January 18, 2004 That's great, I'm glad I could be an inspiration to you. Your writing sounds much more thoughtful than mine, how dare you upstage me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loki Wyrd Posted January 19, 2004 Author Report Share Posted January 19, 2004 (edited) I've been writing a lot of short things lately. Keeps it easy for me. Life is good Living vicariously Through another As it should No risk or reason To explain What you do There really is none ----------------------------- Sexual innuendos Dropped in a way That nobody knows While it's still day ----------------------------- What I would like most In all of the world Is peace and goodwill Or so I am told They're all fairly weak, but I like the last one. I probably could add to these short thigns I write, but for now I choose not to. Edited January 19, 2004 by Loki Wyrd Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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