Appy Posted September 23, 2003 Report Share Posted September 23, 2003 (edited) I toss and turn, unable to sleep Can't find the manner, in which to lie This cocktail of emotions is driving me nuts And it feels all but natural for my lungs to breathe - I will have to rest - But everyday I get up again with shackles around my feet showing the world what I am - Condemned for life - I will put an end to it - now - And life will again be as intoxicating and exhilirating as it used to be - I am allowed to hope - [24 setember 2003, Leverkusen] ************************ ~ A flower for the person who can actually figure out what this is about ~ ~edit; Shakles should say Shackles ofcourse ~ Edited October 20, 2014 by Appy Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Loki Wyrd Posted September 23, 2003 Report Share Posted September 23, 2003 I like it, and that is an interesting style you have there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Appy Posted September 24, 2003 Author Report Share Posted September 24, 2003 Thanks I'm always ready for a new style.. and this is how it happened in my head.. I sometimes wish I could write a sonnet or something, but that's just not me I guess.. I'm too Chaotic for that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyvern Posted September 25, 2003 Report Share Posted September 25, 2003 I liked the poem as well, Appy... In terms of what it seems to be about: in the first stanza of the poem, the narrator describes a certain powerful event of the past that disturbs her rest and hinders her through everyday life. Then, as the poem progresses, the tone shifts and becomes more optimistic as she notes that she'll rely on hope and put an end to the event's haunting her. Thus, the poem might ultimately be about relying on hope and optimism to overcome the dark event's of one's past... Interesting structure too! Nicely done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Appy Posted September 25, 2003 Author Report Share Posted September 25, 2003 Hmmm , I'd say that that's close enough ... *Appy hands Wyvern his flower, and giggles. The flower has a little note attached 'It is illegal to sell this flower to third parties without consulting the first party (being the giver, Appy) about the intentions of the second party (being the receiver, Wyvern)' * I actually wrote it because I stopped smoking.. but I like your explanation.. more applying to anyone that way.. what was that word again, ah right "universal" Thank you for the nice words on the style.. I like experimenting, but it's always a guess if it's still readable/flowing then, so ...Thank you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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