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  1. Doh!

     

    *madhatter stumbles out of the closet*

     

    Good god! For how many ages have I been locked up in there? Appy! Appy, why would you lock me in there?! Ahhh the the lights! They're too bright.

     

    He glances down and notices a crumpled piece of parchment that has seen many a shoe track on its face. A promotion party?! Wah? And I missed it. He takes a closer look and reads m-dhatter. Wait a tick!

     

    That's me!

     

    Weee, thank you so much guys. But man do I have a story for my absence. It'll be up shortly. And expect me on IRC soon. :) Congrats to the other promotees!

  2. madhatter stumbles into the room.

     

    "Hmm... how did I end up in here? I really ought to watch my step."

     

    "My! What a wonderful little song you have there!"

     

    madhatter brushes off the dust off of his coatsleeves and approaches Dros.

     

    He whispers into Dros' ear, "Beware of the bunnies."

     

    Oh and welcome aboard! Hehe, I hope you enjoy yourself and I look forward to reading your other works as well!

  3. Welcome to the Pen as well. Just a heads up - constructive criticism is always helpful. But, if you choose to ignore it, no one's stopping you. Just keep an open mind. Even the best poets look for someone to critique them. But then again, enjoy yourself.

  4. Not too shabby. I liked it :).

     

    Just some suggestions.

     

    Blood flows from my wounds,

    My body becoming weak,

    My strength and inspiration comes from,

    Fighting for your defeat.

    I found that to not be grammatically correct, so I thought that

     

     

    Blood flows from my wounds,

    My body becomes weak,

    My strength comes from

    Fighting for your defeat.

    Would still flow as well.

    I'm not quite sure how many syllables you were going for for each line. Good luck and keep it up :D

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