Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Report Share Posted January 15, 2003 peredhil31 Elder of Lists and Manners Posts: 751 (12/31/01 7:26:51 am) Reply ezSupporter Duel of the Divine -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Assembly Room, Bhurin Very well done. Like all your works I've read so far, the scene descriptions are vivid enough I feel as though I'm watching them on a a movie screen. The use of the word "cometh" seems misplaced to my 'inner ear' as I read. (I like to read a loud.) I'd thought in the King James English the 'th' replaced 's' such that cometh would be comes, but I haven't checked. Keep them coming - you have great talent! -Peredhil Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Author Report Share Posted January 15, 2003 Bhurin Initiate Posts: 14 (12/31/01 1:02:35 pm) Reply Re: Duel of the Divine -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Having reread the story, Bhurin sheepishly smiles. "I think your right. I guess I got a little dramatic there. Oh well, no one ever said the Gods were perfect..." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Author Report Share Posted January 15, 2003 Gyrfalcon25 Bard Posts: 149 (12/31/01 4:15:17 pm) Reply Re: Duel of the Divine -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- *Gyr applauds* Very good... I especially liked the poetry, though its strange that the evil god was the one speaking in poetry while the good goddess was the big booming voice and normal sentances. I don't know, i just always thought that poetry was more.... light-hearted? Hmm... can't think of the words, but more connected to the 'good' side. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archive Posted January 15, 2003 Author Report Share Posted January 15, 2003 Balladore Page Posts: 19 (1/1/02 7:06:09 pm) Reply Re: Duel of the Divine -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Well... King James English... what can I say? I don't know anything about it, that's what I can say ;-) I did enjoy the Story, especially the sacrafice at the end... it was a classic Good Vs. Evil fight, and I enjoy that type of stuff :-) Keep them coming! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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