Guest DoPeY24 Posted September 15, 2002 Report Share Posted September 15, 2002 Lets just say i got mad at someone and wrote this...tell me what you guys think I respect all players, except those who play games Yall don’t bring nothing but trouble, at least around my way I can’t believe how deceived you can make things get So I try to purify the live of wife’s so husbands don’t get stuck with their @#%$ The discombobulation you leave and the fascination you seem to receive Could never compare to the despair and hurt you bring to men like me So I'm taking a stand for every man who knows where I’m coming from You want games, well here's one, the fastest one to swallow my cum I refuse to bring any names into this so ill bleep you out _____ you stupid bitch But what can I expect from an ugly ass hoe that comes from a family of hicks I guess I swallowed more then I could chew, drank more then I could piss @#%$ more times then I could cum, digested more then I could @#%$ In other words you were like a disease eating away at my soul But now that I’m rid of you, I’m purified, and better myself as a whole I've regained my freedom, finally, and now I’m back in control Of my own life, u want some advice, quit playing games Now its back to the second verse, where my attacks in rap my get worse Your like john madden, making plays for your game, I suggest you call time out and reconsider your ways And these types of players vary in size shapes and colors You create and play more games these days then the notorious Parker Bros. If it was up to me I'd take a chance not telling your mothers and fathers Send you to jail without passing go and collecting your $200 dollars Everything around you is trouble, its so bad your chased by cops AND robbers They finally caught you in a mousetrap built by Lincoln loggers If you only had a clue of all the pain in which you've made us cope Your words are like the chandelier where Mr. plum hung himself with a rope When I’m sleeping don’t wake daddy or break my ice cuz it shatters Don’t spill the beans to feed the hippos’ cuz ill push you off your chutes and ladders Don’t come in here with all your games Cuz you’re giving me a headache kid If she don’t leave now I’m going to poker To puncture and sink her battle ship oops didnt even know i mistyped stuff, thanx Wyvern. -DoPeY Which Colossal Death Robot Are You? Edited by: DoPeY24 at: 9/30/02 1:36:13 pm Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyvern Posted September 19, 2002 Report Share Posted September 19, 2002 Dopey, Some comments on "Games"... Truth be told, I didn't really care for the first verse of this poem/rap too much. Though the lines are certainly heart felt and you express your anger and rage quite vividly, there were too many vulgar sexual references for my personal taste... ;p Never the less, it's a thorough introduction that sets the scene for the second half of the piece... On that note, I thought that the second verse of the poem was truly brilliant... a punchline fest of the highest caliber. You took an interesting subject and expanded upon it very creatively, coming up with some excellent memorable lines that would bring any battle contender to their knees. ;p Though they're all great, my personal favorites include: 1) "If you only had a clue of all the pain in which you've made us cope Your words are like the chandelier where Mr. plum hung himself with a rope" 2) "U create and play more games these days then the notorious parker bros." and 3) "If she don’t leave now I’m going to poker To puncture and sink her battle ship." Great stuff, really had me laughing out loud. I'll have to remind myself never to test you in battle... ;p Those are some really lethal lines... One last thing to note: you may want to go back through the poem as there are one or two grammatical errors that sort of subtract from it's rhythm. An example of this would be the first line of the second verse... Wyvern will have to post some written rap now as well, since Dopey's taken the intitiative... [image]http://members.shaw.ca/kea/am/wyvy.jpg[/image] ------------------------------ Almost a Dragon... "My life is one big crime, I try to scheme through it." -Common, "The 6th Sense" Owner of the Decanter of Endless Booze. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest SaberCoEP Posted October 4, 2002 Report Share Posted October 4, 2002 Ah Dopey, I see the HATE has consumed you.. Very good.. Actually, the poem gave me a laugh the whole time, but made me remember the pain I felt from women playing their "games" Nice one bro, keep up the good work. For the end is never seen, always heard and rarely understood. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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