The Big Pointy One Posted March 5, 2009 Report Share Posted March 5, 2009 Tempest of confusion it's been such a long time don't know what to do If I could have you all would be good but who are you? I can not decide I can not be me In the extent of a man when will it happen who will it be when will it happen when will I know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyvern Posted March 16, 2009 Report Share Posted March 16, 2009 Nice poem BPO, I definitely sympathize with its underlying tone and message... I feel a very similar way at times. I really like how the structure of the poem and the way that the lines follow each other kind of compliment the "Tempest of confusion" and mixed emotions of the poem, though the second half of the poem after the question mark didn't read quite as well to me without punctuation as the first half. It might be the line "In the extent of a man" that throws me off a bit... I really like it there, but wonder if there might be some way to punctuate that part of the poem to make it feel more natural. Anyway, thanks for sharing this poem here. Always good to read new stuff from you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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