Regel Posted November 30, 2008 Report Share Posted November 30, 2008 (edited) You haven't been sleeping well Why you keep your room so black? Lock you self away upstairs Then the mirror started talking back Telling you some crazy shit You're pacing like a caged rat. Fade to black I tell you you're coming unhinged You telling me it is not like that I see the fear in your eyes Staring right through your lies You know it's coming back Fade to black. Pacing around the house at night Are you searching for a way out? Let me help you son, try and get some sleep "I'm fine!" you say in a whispered shout I want to believe you, The mirror tries to deceive you. Fade to black What is it that you fear? Is it your situation? Is it what you hear? Is it God's creation? You know I hate to leave you here. I tell you I'll be back Fade to black Edited December 7, 2008 by Regel Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Regel Posted November 30, 2008 Author Report Share Posted November 30, 2008 Just for the record I borrowed heavily from the song Fade to Black by Dire Straits as far as the poems structure and frame work. I needed a way to serve it up and this seemed to fill the bill. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WrenWind Posted December 18, 2008 Report Share Posted December 18, 2008 you have company in the cage and other faces in that mirror if you look for them *hugs* Interesting poem Hon Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyvern Posted January 4, 2009 Report Share Posted January 4, 2009 A very raw poem that I can guess was drawn from a very emotional place. I think the Dire Straights "Fade to Black" structure worked well in driving the content of the poem home, as the repetition in the rhyme structure almost had a depressing feel in and of itself. The subject matter of the poem is also very heartfelt, and something that I'm certain more than a few pennites can relate to. Knowing someone you love is in pain and wanting to help them but having no clear means of doing so is a tough thing to struggle with, though the truth is you probably help them more than you know just by being you and showing that you care. Anyway, here's hoping things have improved since this was written. Thanks for sharing your feelings here, Regel. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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