Silver WInd Posted November 30, 2007 Report Share Posted November 30, 2007 (edited) Ghost For a moment I saw the glimmer reflected in the mirror but when I looked back again she was gone. My heart filled with terror and passing lights flashed into my consciousness. I tired to shake the feeling but the whiteness of her form was so clear. For that brief encounter which forever left me speechless. Could my heart recover the will of imaginative forces bending my sanity. Edited December 1, 2007 by Silver Wind Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Da_Yog Posted December 1, 2007 Report Share Posted December 1, 2007 I think the first stanza was the most intriguing. You did a good job of describing what is transpiring. Some of the other stanzas didn't quite feel in the same mode. Not sure if that was intentional or not. At any rate I think the last word in the first line of the last stanza should be "heart" unless I missed something... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silver WInd Posted December 1, 2007 Author Report Share Posted December 1, 2007 Thank you and, yes it should somehow that one slipped by my notice Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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