Mardrax Posted January 29, 2007 Report Share Posted January 29, 2007 (edited) Bad spirits rising through good spirits sinking down the throat as the anger rises ninety-nine bottles of beer on the wall ninety-nine bottles of beer and if one of them would happen to fall a look a slur a swear and a brawl Good spirits drowned by good spirits rising to the surface as the spirits sink ninety-eight bottles of beer on the wall ninety-eight bottles of beer and if one of them would happen to fall a look a shrug a laugh would be all Edited January 29, 2007 by Mardrax Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyvern Posted January 29, 2007 Report Share Posted January 29, 2007 I like this poem, Mardrax. The way that you twist the traditional verses of "Ninety-Nine Bottles of Beer on the Wall" with a deeper examination of the effects of alcohol is well done, and the wordplay of "good spirits" and "bad spirits" is clever as well. I also like the juxtaposition of "sinking" and "rises" in the first stanza, nice arrangement of words as usual. I think this poem is more direct than some of your other recent stuff, but it isn't any less effective. Thanks for sharing it here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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