Falcon2001 Posted February 18, 2004 Report Share Posted February 18, 2004 With the freewrites coming more and more often as of late, I decided to put them all in one thread, and thereby create something I could eventually print and fling at people. "In my hands" The world was gray Nothing left alive the colors leak'd out long ago leaving husks of gray behind The gray stared at me with lidless malicious gaze I turn'd my face away but I could feel it still The rain froze to my expos'd skin Sending tendrils of pain shooting Until warmth was a gray memory And then was gone Fleeing spiderlike from the horrid Overpowering Gray I clutch'd tightly the bouquet I had found in a brighter land The only color left in this world As I walk'd home from the Gray bus The petals were cloak'd in luscious pink Which at that time seem'd more real than anything I had seen before Defying the tyrannical monochromistic Color schema that had engulf'd the walk home The stems were beauty and truth and light The green so vibrant I look'd away Despite the healing force they brought And so my fragile heart endured The wretch'd comp'ny that walk presented Refresh'd and oriented towards The colors I clutch'd in my frozen hand Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Falcon2001 Posted February 19, 2004 Author Report Share Posted February 19, 2004 "Zero-one." Numbers flare with invasive speed Darting quickly 'cross the screen's spread I wish I could touch them But something holds me back Something screaming no Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Appy Posted February 19, 2004 Report Share Posted February 19, 2004 very .. hmm....enjoyable, the "zero-one" poem/scribble thanks for sharing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Falcon2001 Posted March 2, 2004 Author Report Share Posted March 2, 2004 "Foul" Staring out past the glass Towards the fragile dawn Watching it arise Burning brightly Why do I burn inside Why does my passion flare To anger and fury When I least expect Feeling foul inside today Wanting to scream at everyone Tomorrow looks dim Do I even show up? World grows dim Tinged red with fury Patience leaves My friends draw away It wants to burst out In a sonic outburst Of magnitudes Unknown But if I do I'll Die. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
purple_shadows Posted March 3, 2004 Report Share Posted March 3, 2004 hmmm...the only real complaint that I have is with lines 11 and 13 Tomorrow looks dim World grows dim you repeat dim twice in such a short time period, and it kinda threw me off a bit. Other than that, I liked it. I hope you felt better today, because I couldn't find you anywhere. It was sad, because I was like 'Ok, I'm going to make him be in a good mood even if i colapse and have a coughing fit doing it." and then i accually did have a coughing fit and decided that I should probably head home. lol. *hugs* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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