whynotsin Posted February 3, 2004 Report Share Posted February 3, 2004 ALC na Nala I stood there, Silent and still. He swooped in and kissed. That should have been me, Could have been. Alas a different hand I was dealt.. I plaster a smile on my face. It’s all I can do. As I scramble for a lame excuse to leave. I stumble through the halls, Pure disbelief. My mind is numb, I don’t know why. But I wanted to cry. I told my self it was just the photo chems, But I know it’s all just a lie. On my way home I stare at the blank sky, Snow drifts I pass by. A lonely tear , Streaming down my face. It’s just the chemicals making me cry, I softly chuckle to myself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yuki Kokoro Posted February 6, 2004 Report Share Posted February 6, 2004 I liked the last two lines a lot. I think they added depth to the poem and for me it was much more emotional with those last two lines expressing the common feeling of how painful it is to try to convince yourself something is other than it is. We know it is not and trying to lie makes the truth hurt even more. That repetition and idea in general was a good way to end the poem, rather than with: "A lonely tear, streaming down my face". My only question is... what's the significance of the title? I'm not sure whether I missed something that should be obvious or this has personal meaning for you. Thanks for sharing the poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
whynotsin Posted February 11, 2004 Author Report Share Posted February 11, 2004 Alc Na Nala is sorta of a personal title. actualy discribing the the ppl involed. thanks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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