X-Sabre Posted December 22, 2003 Report Share Posted December 22, 2003 Risk taking, to enjoy happiness. Shape shifting, to change into whatever. Light bending, to hide in the darkness. Plan making, to prepare the endeavor. Keep trying to become what you aren't. Trying to hide among the real. Lying to people like without a heart. Dying to be like what they feel. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yuki Kokoro Posted December 23, 2003 Report Share Posted December 23, 2003 I'd suggest changing "whatever" into something else because to me it makes that line sound unfinished, but that's just personal preference. Also the second to last line could be "Lying to people like you have no heart". Over-all: good poem. ...and that last line really resonates for me... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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