Dros

Verse 1

Through the trails of darkness

No light to guide your way

No emotion taking you over

No sign of clear day

(4 measure break)

Verse 2

Time slowly passes by

Your world suddenly stands still

Mirages of your life leave you blind

Of your own will

(4 measure break into chorus)

Chorus

I'm sorry, So sorry

I painted this world for you

I'm sorry, Just so sorry

I left it, black and blue

Some voices are just left unheard

This is all I have so far... Any suggestions?

OOC: Awesome stuff Gyrfalcon! It was alotta-fun.

Thank you!

Affair

Lust

Oh man! After reading this, I'm steadily reminded of my first etch-a-sketch. Oh the memories! I especially love the lines

But now inocent blood has been spilt!

The pure and holy blood of an etcha- sketch.

detonate

I'll comment myself..

Here it is :

LALALALALALALALALA bOrEd

Once upon a time

I could hear your voice

But that was long ago

Once upon a time

I could feel your touch

But I soon let you go

Once upon a time

I could see your soul

But now it's just too cold

Once upon a time

I could taste your sweet lips

But the taste has run dry

Once upon a time

I could run to you

But now why should I try

Once upon a time

You said you loved me

But I guess that was a lie

Authority

Rebirth

Burn

Zoom

Compromise

Bootylicious *sorry guys... i had too *

I have fallen asunder the non existent reality of turbulant love

compromised by receding infatuation...

To seek the escape from the spectrum of grey

that has entombed my fore most

desire

of this very life force....

I've become trapped...

Buried under the lost

childhood of

forgotten dreams

which have taken me captive

of my own regrets

leaving nothing but sleepless

nights and thoughtless emotion

as of the sweet death

that resides

in the rose petal's Red

last to receive the reassurance

of the heart's

companionship... Lost

and Forsaken, the

withered betrayal

of a misunderstood

love whose only redemption

has eclipsed

the abstracted lust

of an etched mortality to

once again

Fall asunder...

The non existent

Reality.....

I really enjoy this poem Regel, the imagery is awesome. And as Wyvern said, changing "groans" into groaned should help a bit. But other than that, great piece!

Nurture

Cycle

Transmission

SURFING!!!!!

21

Glad to help!

cosmic

MiP (men in plaid)

Hmm... The last concert I went to was put on by a local band here in Ferndale, Washington. They're pretty nifty n' all. Very Very Very energetic and outspoken. It was fun. They play alternative/funk music. Yay for funk