whitenoise

Wrote this one about another girlfriend (before we broke up, of course) --------------------------------------- Farewell, my beloved it appears time is not on our side it runs short like a fountain of youth flowing quickly and ending just as fast the darkness is closing in but with your light to guide me, I sleep Oh, how you possess my mind and spirit If only I could possess your body forever I see you and want it to be like last night the night that will live forever in my mind but unfortunately will not last forever into the morning if only it could we could be so perfect whitenoise

*repetitive statement of how much this poem is liked* *apology for not having anything creative to say*

I like it. You seem to be a person who lives on their own terms, which is always good. Don't ever do something just because others do it, or because someone tells you to. Nice poem

wow...both of you have very good points there... Nicely written poem...all your rhymes were related to the subject...I always hate that when someone can't think of something that rhymes, so they throw in some weird phrase...nice poem

Very nice...very passionate. Your style is close to mine, so I appreciate it very much. I hope that if you are like me, then the feelings will fade and you'll get back to normal life...I'm pretty sure you don't like feeling like that (I don't). Very nice.

Thank you guys for your feedback. small_scale_mind_games Yeah, at the time I still thought I was going to get into music as a profession, so in my mind I was writing lyrics. That changed awhile back, as did my aspirations, and now I just think of it as writing poetry.

Man, you got it pretty close. It was about my former girlfriend, who happened to be either suicidal or just masochist, and I got all upset because she didn't do anything to stop her life-threatening behavior. She was on prozac for depression, yet she was still drinking every weekend and doing ecstacy at raves (I found out all of this after we started going out). Needless to say, I got out of that situation pretty quickly. Didn't want to get sucked into that mess. Oh, and sorry if it seems cryptic or anything...that's just my writing style.

it appears I have posted this in the wrong area...my apologies. I guess this should be posted in the Banquet Hall. I guess I could use the loophole by saying it was posted on my own website? I dunno.

Wrote this sometime last school year...something like November 2001. Lost Deep Put on your face dress in lace leave not a trace of dirt Throw your voice to the top of the hole in grassy knoll You're on top, I hear you No, on bottom, I see you No one cares about depth No one sees it I, yes I, find you so very lost Need you rope, while friends give you shovel, pile dirt on top of you, child please stop digging Need you hope, 'stead buy you dope, friend? drugs you alope, pretend everything’s fine while you Put on your face dress in lace leave not a trace of depression Whitenoise