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The Death of Rats

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  1. The Death of Rats,

    he ate some spats,

    all with his curds and whey

     

    The Thane of Cawdor,

    he shaved an otter;

    a non-suggestive display

     

    The Monk's Hood,

    it did some good

    in preventing tooth decay

     

    The crocodile watched

    he watched it all

    and only smiled

     

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  2. Where has he gone? He said I'd be safe here.

    Where has he gone? Is he safe?

    I know he stands better on his own, but together we are more stable than we could ever be apart.

    Where has he gone? Oh.

     

    The long things are back, grasping. Am I going to rejoin him?

     

    I hope so.

     

    I feel so incomplete, so... off balance.

     

    The long, pale things took him. The sound was awful.

     

    I don't like the way their eyes stare at me from their throats.

     

    Will I see him? Is he safe?

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  3. An avatar of death, a Frenchman, and a cat-man with no pants walk into the Cabaret.

     

    Wait, you've heard this one?

     

    Bugger.

     

     

    The Cat-man spoke first, mouth agape, yellow eyes wide under a beige stetson. "Cor. Fancy, it is."

     

    "Stranger indeed than my home, gentlemen. And this is saying something," replied the Frenchman, drinking it all and everyrone in, but much more critically.

     

    SQUEAK, rejoined the tiny, toothy, tailed avatar. The three stood resolutely, but seemed for the moment unininterested in moving forward as yet. Well, the tiny avatar did, but- even skeletal as his body is - made a small show of waiting impatiently for his companions to get on with it.

  4. Feebleminded scientists

    rock the discotheque

    Funeral for the last electron

    where is everyone?

    pretty much all ice skating

    Should be working at work

     

    Dear Fraudboy:

    Leave a message,

    I'l reply when I can

  5. Hold me closer, Tony Danza

    The planes in Spain fall

    mainly in the rain

     

    Goin' to the chapel

    and we're gonna get buried

     

    Don't go ridin'

    on that long black train

    bound for nowhere

     

    Power corrupts

    with great responsibility

     

    No man is a

    seven nation army

     

    It's just a jump to the left

    to cross the road

     

    I walk the lime

    I walk the lime

  6. SQUEAK, comments the rat skeleton in a black, hooded robe.

     

    A young man dressed in the finest silks and satin, with immaculately coiffed hair, looks up from fastidiously tearing the pages from a hardback copy of 'Twilight' and tearing each one in half before letting the pieces flutter to the floor.

     

    The cutlass at his hip bobs slightly as he sets down the abused book and turns to the audience.

     

    "I believe what my commander means to say is 'Once or twice a month'."

     

    He smiles, tight-lipped, and turns back to his methodic work.

  7. We'll go for a walk and the toilet'll explode

    when the shit hits the fan

    we'll remember to lend a hand

    the office is full, it's time to go

    It's a wonderful day to be outside

    (even though it's really loud)

    No-one else is around;

    it's nice not having to work

    but I'm getting kind of lonely

  8. The shade looked at Tora sadly. Like all spirits, it had been traumatized to the core by the transition from the ethereal realms to the earthly ones, and like all spirits, its own emotions bled directly into the minds of the physical.

     

    Alas, as well, its fear had been so intense that while a creature of the immortal could endure the unpleasantness (with trepidation), something whose understanding was still limited by five senses stood no chance of standing against the pain and terror.

     

    Such as the luckless apprentice lying unconscious by the fire.

  9. We remove scars, chins, and asses.

    We tune up cars, pianos, and fish.

     

    Dances if you want them,

    No children left behind.

     

    No parking in rearview mirror.

    Objects may be closer than they appear.

     

    No fishing,

    No shoulders,

    No talking

     

    Please return your seat to its upright and locked position

    It's my creation

  10. Footprints in the urinal

     

    shoelaces in the ceiling

     

    Wheeling and dealing

     

    With feeling like lemmings

     

    peeling paint from their

     

    oranges on the footstools

     

    of strife with Harvey McKay

     

    It's all a sham plan

     

    to shampoo your feet

     

    and llamas until its too

    late.

  11. Pulled recklessness and irresponsibility out of where? I didn't quite understand sorry.... :/

    Ah. Out of the poem. Extreme impatient feeling, it evokes, to a reckless AND irresponsible level.

     

    Rather neatly conveys someone who is/is about to do something very ill-advised, maybe even dangerous.

     

     

     

    and that line that made me gag - you don't find that so cliche and unappealing?

     

    Nope. Other than it's much longer, it flows with the rest (perhaps more lyrically than poetically, but still).

    Sorry for the cheesyness

    , however reads like it could be cut out entirely and not interrupt the poem at all.

     

    Does *that* line have any deeper meaning?

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