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The Pen is Mightier than the Sword

WrenWind

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  1. I had trouble with that line and I'm still not sure how to fix it. Open to suggestions though.

     

    For just one night,

    to hold you tight.

     

    Too much to ask?

    Too hard a task?

     

    For just one night,

    to still the fright.

     

    No guilty thought.

    No presents bought.

     

    For just one night,

    to taste delight.

     

    Just have your heart.

    Just be one part.

     

    For just one night,

    to love your light.

  2. For just one night,

    to hold you tight.

     

    Too much to ask?

    Too hard a task?

     

    For just one night,

    to still the fright.

     

    No guilty thought.

    No presents bought.

     

    For just one night,

    to taste delight.

     

    Just have your heart.

    Just feel you start.

     

    For just one night,

    to love your light.

  3. And so I kiss her softly,

    And I whisper that I care,

    And if she rubs my belly,

    I'll be growling like a bear!

     

    I love this bit ! It made me laugh. Th whole piece if great it rolls through different emotions and flows well.

  4. good work .

    "

    There I sat in silent daze,

    Longing to tell you i missed you so much,

    But could not risk that depth of words,

    As you might think I need your crutch."

     

    this struck me the most . The depth of emotion in this made me cry

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