Silver WInd

Opal Eyes

The vines begin to choke

for a heart that bleeds in thorns

the poison slowly drips

passing through the veins

Breathing slowly the dragon's breath

tarnishing around the edges

truth is sought among the brambles

Spoken is the word of silence

rest not your weary souls

lest the dreamscape swallow it up

beyond the night of the raven

The Raven Moon casts a shadow

only the graveyard dance

will uncover the mystery

hidden beyond.

Very suspenseful, I cannot wait to see what happens next. So far it seems like an intresting idea, that drew me right in, and it was very well written. Good work

The only thing I would say, is that the part in the middle, when we find out just how he met Rose, thier computer messages, it is a little confusing at first, that that is a flashback more or less, and it took me a while to figure out what was going on with that. Perhaps you could make that part a little more clear.

But other then that, it was really good.

This is done in the style known as Tyburn. I do not write in this style very often, becasue it can come off as being a somewhat ugly and awakard style, as well as challanging to work with. But now and then I do like to do different things, and so I decidied to play around with it.

The Nameless

Painless

Stainless

Shameless

Nameless

In the stainless sky stands the nameless

gives a shameless oath to be painless.

Thank you very much.

I would have to agree with you reguarding the line ridden and I admit that one was somewhat forced to fit into the rhyme.

I could not think of anything else at the moment, that would fit in with the poem, that rhymed with Hidden and Forebidden.

The Midnight Witch

Cloaked within the veil of midnight hair

her eyes seemed to cast shadows upon the wall

and none could escape her eternal stare

she would be the one to bring the downfall

in silence she would beckon those who dare

upon their knees to her they come at a crawl

and so she sang sweetly into the night

cast in the flickering dance of candle light

Her voice would bring the stars trembling in lust

concealed in darkness she remains hidden

with a single touch she will turn all to dust

her fruits when offered are always forbidden

of those judged unworthy she would ridden

so sinister her eyes filled with the sky

and always her rose red lips speak a lie

Beware when midnight strikes and you hear her song

only with a glance she will invoke desire

and from there your waiting doom will not come long

for within you she will light her fire

no longer you will be aware of the wrong

only with your death she will conspire

into the dark unknown she weaves her dance

and you prepare to take up your last stance.

The Bleeding

Every night I lay in bed not sleeping

and every fight has to have a reason

while everyday I lost another part of myself

all the time I lay there dreaming

trying to find a way to understand

and every right has to be taken

so we all are left crying

I find myself always dying

trying to hold on

just looking for something

but never is it enough

to try and stop the bleeding

Wow I really like this one. It is very sad but paints such a vivid picture.

Winter Bloom

Shadows are drifting by darkling shadows

graveyard rose blooms in the winter graveyard

whispers of the wind bring in night whispers

weeping willows dance to ravens weeping

darkness falling softly into darkness

hushed wing beats create ravens hush

silver rains fall from moons silver

bleeding not from the thorns ever bleeding

fear not the gathering but breathe the fear

dance in devils light the eternal dance

haunted is the howl for the haunted

silent songs for the stars so silent

falling softly memories ever falling

winter roses bloom in snowy winter.

Very touching and emotionaly provocative. I rather enjoyed it. Nice job with the rhyme scheme, it flowed very well.

This is done in a form known as a Shadow Sonnet that was created by a poet frined of mine

Loving You

Forever I'm holding you forever

never would I let you go never

tender you kiss me I hold you tender

eyes full of love I look you in the eyes

sweet is my laughter for your words so sweet

bound together we are forever bound

hand clasped in your warmth you hold my hand

you are my only one always I'm with you

all that you are you are my one and all

embrace me with your eternal embrace

we stay together meant to be one are we

whisper in my ear sweet whisper

tempting me softly your eyes so tempting

love you forever, you I always love

Thank you very much, I look foward to sharing my poetry here

I am a liar and a thief

For taking smiles that are not mine

and saying it is beacuse I am happy

I really loved those lines

Wow, I really like this. Nicely done

There was a rose

it bloomed only under the moon

while its vines dug in deep

each thorn pulsed with blood

as the blossom gorges upon itself

ever fuller it grows

the seed implanted deep within

while it awaits to birth open

aromatic sweetness tinged

with bitter.

Soon each petal

would slip away

falling like winter rain

until the stalk is left bare

with only one sweet memory

of what once had been.

So the song is sung

that never had been heard

with the winds passage

fires burn bright in the skies

while the moon is blinded

and so her lover must pale

scorched by viscous sunlight.