EdenSinger

EdenSinger tries to look up, to catch a glimpse of that dark beak... and she looks over on the one side too, to the other bird tickling her cheek.. and she smiles! With her eyes too. Thank you both!! You're making this exciting! Reverie, thanx for your feedback and for your suggestions - I will look them up. Epic poetry... does that include Alfred Lord Tennyson?? xox

Hello Peoples I am new, I've never posted any of my poems here before, so I don't know exactly how things work here.. and i understand there are some rules... or something? If i do or say something i am not supposed to, i apologize in advance and feel free to correct me.. Here are 3 poems I wrote, they are sort of related and were all inspired by nature and mother earth: poem no.1: Mer-May Poseidon whispers beckoning reach, of what I have come for; Mayn't sirens, gorgons dreaming, crash ashore and yet, freckle? Time, spilled whole Behind ocean drunk; I blue-dive so, in finite. Mightn't merging, not emerging merging, peel the world decent cloth? Mirrorship battered, on lead all... Reflected in order did I mind. Mustn't the shores washing like caressing, consider known-not, carry the tide? poem no.2: Ice Queen Ships of voices gone with breath, sleeping like the fair maiden shores. The one oracle of wind, motherest teach molten tides, torrents can freeze and erase... cornfields deep Goddess below, raying the skies, might we begin our vision a-new? Walkers of sleep, no doubt there, But I have spared a life somewhere, And what happened then, kindly, was you poem no.3: Mother, Play-ground From the sundown of Sunday, we sharpened our spears and sticks to play heavy over her beloved hands. Her cries might fill the air like a 'gull but our childishness cannot stand that there is such a realm un-reached, such a one we could not claim; Mother, we are not asking

Honey bunch, i can see how this was a very personal poem but kudos to you for posting it! I really like the first part of the poem because it is more general and i feel like i can relate to it.. It can't not affect a girl.. It's just beautiful and the rest of the poem i like too, it's like lots of little different beat poems put into one. They could work on their own just as well when put into this combination i think.. but the first and the last verses i really like, again because i feel like i can relate to them. Not to say that the rest of the poem is for any less, caused obviously it describes your personal experience - a little bit hurt and nostalgic how i see it but that's why its beautiful! oh and i love the twist you used with "now." i think it really sets you up for a turn. ~ i think if you wanted to put just the first and the last verses together, you could and you'd have a whole different experience of that poem.. but that's just me...i tend to swear by the 'less is more" rule.. but i really still love your poem just as it is now thanx for sharing it (and telling me to look it up) xox