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Mistress Muse

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  1. When Muse crashed the Banquet Hall,

    The party was in full swing,

    The moon was shining full & bright,

    The bells began to ring;

    But then Muse crashed the banquet Hall,

    And ended everything.

    When Muse crashed the Banquet Hall,

    The punch turned into suet;

    The marble floors were thick with glue,

    Harmony screamed “I knew it!”

    The rugs grew mildew in rainbow hues,

    But smelled of dirty socks—

    and all the Banquet fare was et

    by little Goldilocks.

    The party balloons all turned pink,

    Then changed to elephants,

    When Muse appeared, then quickly fled

    To avoid consequence.

    Heh, heh.

  2. I was going to say, play with the rhythm a little... Say, like this:

     

    Munching and crunching in the back of my mind,

    Breaking up dreams and spewing some kind

    Of nasty ideas, and things terribly cruel

    Things that should never be allowed to rule

    Dark corners, and hallways are now out of sight

    And taking advantage of somebody's plight

    Brewing in darkness, the things one should hate,

    Waiting for someone to come take the bait,

    To Then send all the horrid ble dreams that way

    That To come in the dark, and eat all they may.

    Yet all of the monsters, bone-crushing and vile,

    Can still bring about things to make others smile.

    For while during the hour when dark things roam around,

    One must create lightness to brighten the sound,

    To send the dark, evil things fleeing away,

    Great heroes are made, with the breaking of day.

    switchedà[the monsters] therefore, as cruel as they are,

    though breaking up dreams and wandering far,

    Aren't really so bad, since they let one create

    Bright shiny new things to that can challenge that fate.

     

    I added the parts in red, and scored the parts I think could possibly be removed…see what you think.

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