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Patrick

Wish

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Of the canopy of stars overhead

Not one deigns falling

- ungrantable wish

 

The daily horoscope in the newspaper

Holds no promise

- hopeless wish

 

Soothsayers, cheap fortune tellers

Don't even bother

- unfathomable wish

 

You should know what you want

Before asking for it

- unexpressable wish

 

Or you should just stop waiting

For it to happen

- unnecessary wish

 

 

 

Weird, weird poem structure...somehow felt appropriate.

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Hey, I really like the structure of this poem Patrick! :) The choice of words in expressing the various types of wishes were very good for the most part, and the way that all forms of wishing were painted in a negative light definitely made for an interesting read. I think the first stanza of the poem might be my favorite, just because the first two lines expressing that stanza seem ever so slightly more challenging than the others. Between this and your "Take the Knife" poem, you seem to be touching upon some very heavy emotions... hope all's well over on your end of the world.

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woo-hoo! yay, I'm not alone!! <clears throat after the outburst> very interesting. <tries to sound like proper Englishwoman, even though I have no English in my ancestry that I know of.> :D

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