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Ran Yoko

Dreams of Flying

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started putting together little bits and pieces, and voila: a new poem. might be a little awkward in spots, but it's something I dream about.

 

"DREAMS OF FLYING"

 

I feel like I

have wings,

but I cannot use them.

This longing to fly,

I must wonder,

what will ever become of it?

 

To feel the wind

through my wings,

flying through the clouds.

To see the ocean

spread below me,

flying with the seagulls.

 

To be able to

just fly away,

away from it all.

See mystic sights

and far-off lands

and meet everyone there.

 

Instead of having

my head in the clouds,

I wish all of me were there.

Not constricted by

laws of the earth,

but laws of the skies.

 

Sometimes I

can close my eyes

and pretend that I am flying.

But something will always

disturb me and then,

I find that it was only a dream.

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glad you posted this. particularly resonated to

"Instead of having

my head in the clouds,

I wish all of me were there."

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Hey, I really like this. From the first line it was instantly relateable - I can definitely understand the feeling. The imagery of the second stanza was very evocative, and the rest of it followed well - you never lost me. I particularly liked the third stanza.

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I like how clean this poem is. It invokes the strongest imagry and thoughts with the shortest and simpliest words and lines. There's no one excess and nothing more needs to be added. This is indeed a work of a mature poet. Very well done.

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I like how clean this poem is. It invokes the strongest imagry and thoughts with the shortest and simpliest words and lines. There's no one excess and nothing more needs to be added. This is indeed a work of a mature poet. Very well done.

What he said! :)B)

I too have dreams of flying, which I've had for years, very strange thing about them, I had to teach myself to dream that way...more on that in my other posts!

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