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First Lines (V. 2.0)

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In odd we place our trust,

For the relentlessness of the mundane, is the lie of the land,

Faking the promises of bounty, as she starves us,

Breaking our resolve on her rocky breast,

Opening our wounds anew with each faltering step.

 

Common ground is no friend to us now,

For the voices of reason are estranged,

And the open mic calls silently to us to speak,

Resonating with the obscene and vulgar,

Dousing the audience in a flood of unfamiliar truth.

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New line: Stones thrown through a glass heart...

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Stones thrown through a glass heart -

Poor, fragile thing -

Will it break apart?

Will the pain sting?

 

Hammer blows of emotion to the mind -

Flashes of light to the blind -

Will it go mad?

All emotions drained sad?

 

Or will the glimmer of hope prevail?

Will she be able to lift the veil?

Her touch breaking -

Walls shattering -

Hope

 

Love?

Lost?

 

 

Next line: Please stay...just another day

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Please stay just another day?

Your whispered footfalls fade,

Empty rooms and hall devoid,

Vocal ambiance muted now.

Foggy shrouds strong as walls,

Each vacant space devours,

Mists of tears, and tendrilled fears,

Wrap, and tear, and taint my stare,

Creaking voice, creaking doors,

Crumbling roof, cracking walls,

No escape, tumbling quakes,

This little world just a void,

Dust billows into black.

 

Last breath of hope denied.

Lament my loss, move it aside,

Become the shadow in which I hide.

 

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New Line: "The wind whispers woven words..."

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The wind whispers woven words

The stream sings soft songs

The ocean offers oblivion

The ship slowly sails...away

 

 

Crypt, I really liked the alliteration going on, of course, being me, I had to break it in the last line. Because structure in poems is made to be played with. ;p

 

Next line: The snow-capped mountains of hell

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The snow-capped mountains of hell

He grunted as the last pick fell

Whoever said this was a good idea

Obviously had a head full of dust hair

 

The snow-capped mountains of hell

Where if falling no one would hear you yell

The peak is here but what view for me

More damned mountains and then the sea

 

 

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Oops, next line.... - Would you hold it for me?

Edited by Fluke

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Responding to my own line (badly) because I's bored.

 

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Would you hold it for me?

Would you ensure it's safe?

Could you wait and see?

Could you stand the chafe?

 

Would you hold it for me?

Would you treat it as art?

Could you let me be free?

Could you keep my heart?

 

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Next line - Dusk and other deadly dances

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Dusk and other deadly dances

Echo through the darkened sky.

With the dawn the music stops

and those who live will wonder why.

 

Leave the broken ground for now,

Take your place within the air.

And if danger rears its ugly head,

depart this world without a care.

 

 

 

Next line:

Across the river, under the boughs

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Across the river, under the boughs

grows a circle of mushrooms

A faire ring

 

Can you hear the music

Will you join the Dance

and with the Fair Folk

wildly prance.

 

Will They stay

and let you play

Or in an instant

fade away ?

 

Will you dance

till break of day

And like a Mist

then fade away...

 

 

 

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Will you join the dance

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Will you join the dance,

the fatal dance,

by the ring of steel accompanied?

 

Will you join the song,

the bloody song,

the heavens quaking at our hatred?

 

When your shield is splintered,

when your spear is broken,

when your sword is lost,

when your mail is rent,

when your knife slips from bloody fingers,

will you howl your rage and fight on, to their deaths and yours?

 

Then you are one of us.

 

 

 

Next line:

You are one of us.

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You are one of us

In this fact I fully trust

You see us even tho we Shroud

And pick us out from the crowd

 

You see us when we are not there

And tho we're strange, You do not care

You talk with those less seen than air

And you can also disappear

 

One of us you must surely be

Else you'd not so clearly see

The things they say cannot be

 

 

Next line: Will you come with us and be set free ?

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Will you come with us and be set free?

From bonds that bind and ties that be

 

Will you turn your eyes and walk away

From your past, your yesterday

 

Will you search, for the unknown

Strange new things, a brand new home

 

Will you take that step, wherever it may lead

And come with us

 

To be set free

 

 

Next line: Angry flowers lie in wait

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